Fishing Q&A

Is this okay for the first chapter of my book?

Public Comments

1. You story sounds good! :) 5 stars! :)
2. i really like it could turn out to be really great!!
3. honey if you want to write it then put your whole heart into the words and it'll be good but if you want to know what others think before you even finish then you aren't motivated enough to pour your soul out and will never reach your full potential....I think this start is not bad, work on your personal style maybe, but it;s good. Just remember to throw your heart on the page while slapping down the words.
4. it was good but a bit like twilight girl moves in with her father to a small wet town evey1 thinks shes beautiful she falls for a vampire and you didnt really fit claras threat in there very well like she just all of a sudden threatens her for no reason i mean even mean girls let something happen even if its little before threatening them it was good but its like i already read it from the first paragraph all i could think about was reading my copy of twilight again sorry but i would read more if you put it out there